读后续写：情感刻画（解析版）

专题读后续写情感刻画解析版20情感细节包括人物的感受、情绪，是续写中必不可少的细节描写之一合理的情感情绪描写与刻画，可以凸显人物的性格、人际关系的特征、以及烘托故事高潮进而突出语篇主题等因此，合理的情感情绪刻画在续写中是非常必要的以下就是读后续写过程中，刻画人物情感情绪的四个方法［

一、直接描写法直接利用恰当的表情感的形容词、副词或名词、介词短语等表达人物的喜怒哀乐例如快乐等、吃惊等形容词happy,delighted,pleased,joyful,enjoyable surprised,shocked,amazed,astonished或介词短语等描述人物的情绪to onessurprise,in relief,in panic［

二、环境烘托法利用环境细节“融情于景”烘托人物的情感［彳列］1Della finishedher cryingand driedher face.She stoodby thewindow andlooked outunhappily at a gray小说《麦琪的礼物》中利用个形容词体现了的难cat walkingalong agray fencein agray backyard.3gray,Della受和不开心【例］涌上心头2sth.well upon me/sth.swept overme一股恐惧涌上心头A floodof fearwelled upin me.高考真题［全国新爆米花］

12020.7He wasso delightedthat hecould hardlyspeak,but hisbright smileface spokefor him.［浙江给买狗作伴］

22020.1Poppy Poppyjumped withjoy at the sightof thelittle dog.［浙江与善忘母亲一同旅游］

32017.11Every timewe mentionedthe funnyincidents of the journey,a pleasantsmilewould spreadover Moms face.［

三、动作反映法After buyinga pair of newshoes/she walkedinto theclothing department.Coming to a dressingmirror,looking atherself in the mirror up and down and fixing her eyes on her shoes,Wont Ilook morebeautiful if my shoes match a perfectdress onmy body”thought Missus Sommers to herself,waving to the salesgirlof the department.Missus Sommersaskedher what the fashionable dress styles of this year were and whether she could try them on.Her requestsapproved,MissusSommers kept trying on whatever she considered was the best on her body.With differentbeing changeddresses onherbody,she turnedaround andaround infront of the mirror,admiring herselfas if she were a super model at a fashion show.One dressafter anothertried on,she putthem into her shoppingcart fondly.”What alovely woman!is theresponse foreveryone to see me.smiled Missus Sommers.She wasabout toleave thestore whena kidrunning aroundreminded her of something.C€Oh,my!Dear me!I forgotall about my kids!”yelled Missus Sommers,realizing that she haddone somethingwrong andstarting to blame herself.Excuse me,salesgirl,would yoube sokind asto letme putback allI hadchosen,for I had intendedto buymy daughterJaniea newpair ofshoes,Mag anotherdress,boys newshirts andall ofthem new stockings I must have lost my head!,,Asense of responsibility of caring about her kids drove her to think ofthe right idea where themoney shouldgo.利用恰当的动作描写反映人物的情绪例如下面文章片段中的句子With nopath tofollow,Jane justwalked onfor quitea longtime.After she had climbedtoahigh place,she」（动作描写，说明满怀期望）复第3丝印用介遢短造体现Umwda[QUndhoping tosee theake.Jane望失落）She suddenlyrealized that she waslost.]

四、句式变换法利用高级句式和修饰成分细化情感细节句型独立主格结构1:

①.（利用名词和独立主格结构，描“Absolutely!replied John,excitement shinningin hiseyes excitement写的兴奋激动）John约翰答道，“一定他两眼兴奋地闪闪发光句型2so.・・that结构

②（彳到装句型）So angrywas thebear thatit roaredand smackedthe fenceviolently.so...that熊怒火中烧，开始咆哮并用爪子猛烈地拍击护栏句型3how+宾语从句

③（弓|导的宾语从句，介词You cannot imaginehow frightenedwe wereattheapproach ofthe polarbear.how短语）你无法想象北极熊向我们逼近时我们多么的恐惧句式4非常…I am more than+情感类形容词to…,得知你被北京大学录取，我非常高兴mmorethan happyto learnthat youare admittedto PekingUniversity句式5让我非常…的是…Much tomy+情感类名词，…令我非常失望的是，没有人站过来帮助我Much tomy disappointment,no onecame upto giveme ahelping hand.［句子演练.按要求补全下面动作、情感和心理细节的句子I简又害怕又无助，靠着一棵树坐下，歇歇疼痛的双脚.

1.（形容词短语/非谓语动词作状语）Jane sat against atree,

2.“如果我没有和汤姆吵架，我现在就不会被困在这里了，她想，悔恨的泪水模糊了她的眼睛2“,she thoughtto.（虚拟语气的倒装句，复合结构）herself with她挣扎着站起来寻找那个湖

3.她精疲力竭，她爬上一块大石头，躺了下来，很快睡着了

4.（状语从句,________________________________________________________________________so...that一连串的动作）简醒来时天已经亮了

5.尽管很沮丧，她还是决定继续前进

6..（让步状语从句）e she decided to continue forcing her way ahead（状语从句的省略句）she decidedto continueforcing herway ahead.a.随着小溪的声音，她向水边走去7（非谓语动词作状语）!she walkedtoward the water.突然，她注意到远处有一个熟悉的身影向她走来

8.___________________________________________（非谓语动词作宾补）将以上补全后的各句合并为短文，注意恰当的衔接过渡n.参考答案（形容词短语/非谓语动词作状语）I.

1.Scared andhelpless,Jane satagainst atree,resting heraching feet.

2.“Had Inot quarreledwith Tom,I wouldnthave beentrapped here,“she thoughtto herselfwith regretfultears（虚拟语气的倒装句，复合结构）clouding her eyes.with

3.She struggledto herfeet tosearch for the lake.（状语从句，

4.She becameso exhaustedthatsheclimbed uponto abig rockjaydown and fell fastasleap.so...that一连串的动作）

5.It wasdaybreak when Jane woke up.（让步》犬语从句）

6.Although shewas depressed,she decidedto continueforcing herway ahead.（状语从句的省略句）Although depressed,she decidedto continueforcing herway ahead.（非谓语动词作状语）

7.Following[he sound ofthe stream,she walkedtoward thewater.（非谓语动词作宾补）

8.Suddenly shenoticed afamiliar figureatadistance comiogtowards her.Scared andhelpless,Jane satagainst atree,resting heraching feet.Had Inot quarreledwith Tom,I wouldn*t havebeentrapped here,“she thoughtto herselfwith regretfultears cloudinghereyes.She struggledtoherfeet tosearch forthelake.However,she becameso exhaustedthatsheclimbed uponto abig rock,lay downandfellfast asleep.It wasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Although depressed,shedecidedtocontinueforcingherwayahead.Following thesoundofthestream,she walkedtowardthewater.Suddenly shenoticed afamiliar figureatadistance comingtowards her.补充语料】I11愤怒类

1.彳也气得大发雷霆发怒1He wasfuming withrage.fume v.⑵他几乎控制不住怒火He couldhardly controlhis rage.⑶.他气得脸色阴沉脸上一块乌云His faceclouded withanger悲伤忧愁类

2.⑴他静静站着，眼泪顺着面颊流了下来He stoodsilently,tears rollingdown hischeeks.我漂浮在悲伤的海洋里2I feellike Iam floatingin anocean ofsadness.⑶.她手在颤抖，她快要哭了边缘Her handswere shaking.She wason theverge oftears verge听至消息，他淹没在悲伤中4Hearing thenews,so desperatewas hethat hewas drownedwith sadness.U⑸.他们坐在那里，带着一脸忧郁They satthere withglum lookson theirface害怕类

3.［浙江卷农场游玩迷路］

12018.6Tears offear andregret rolleddown mycheeks.［浙江卷与朋友骑车遇狼］

22017.6After hearingMac sexperience,they froze,their mouthshanging open.⑶他转过身来，眼里充满了恐惧He turnedto me,with hiseyes fullof horror.恐惧慢慢蔓延到她身上4Fears slowlycrept uponher.⑸她脸色苍白站在那里，舌头打结，说不出话Her faceturned paleand stoodthere tongue-tied.［【补充语料】2关于情感句子的积累表达情感的形容词+动作具体描写，用so..that...、兴奋.我激动得跳了起来1I wasso excited/thrilled that I gavea jumpin theair、开心我高兴得上蹿下跳2I wasso happy/cheerful that I jumpedup anddown.、感动.我感动得一句话也说不出来3I wasso movedthat Ifailed tosay aword、悲伤,我难过得用手捂住了脸4I wasso sadthat Ihid my face inmy hands、生气我气得一句话也说不出来5I wasso angrythatIfailed tosay aword.、害怕.我害怕得手心冒汗，心怦怦直跳6I wasso scared/frightened thatmy palmssweated andmy heartpounded、羞愧我羞愧得感觉自己的脸在燃烧7I wasso ashamedthatIcould feelmyfaceburning.［模拟练习01读后续写阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事Missus Sommersone dayfound herselfthe unexpectedowner offifteen dollars.It seemedtohera verylarge amountofmoney.For aday ortwo she walked around in adreamy stateas shethought abouther choices.Her daughterJanie waswearingworn shoesand needednew ones.She wouldbuy clothfor newshirts forthe boys.Her daughterMag shouldhaveanother dress.And stillthere wouldbe enoughleft fornewstockingsfor herchildren.The ideaabout howto spendthedollars madeher restlesswith excitement.On theday sheplanned togo shoppingwith themoney,she atea lightmeal-no!Between gettingthe childrenfed andthehouse cleaned,and preparingherself togo shopping,she forgotto eatat all!When shearrived atthe largedepartment store,she spotteda pileof silkstockings atthe entrance.A signnearbyannounced that they hadbeen reducedin pricea younggirl behindthe counterasked herifshewished toexamine thesilkyleg coverings.She smiledas ifshe hadbeen askedto inspectdiamond jewelry,and startedto feelthe soft,expensive items.Missus Sommerspicked upa blackpair andlooked atthem closely.Two redmarks suddenlyshowed onher paleface.Shelooked upattheshop girland saidproudly,“Well,I willbuy thispair.”MissusSommerschanged hercotton stockingsforthenew silk ones inthe ladiesrest area.She hadlet herselfbecontrolled bysome machine-like forcethat directedher actionsand freedherofresponsibility.How goodwas thetouch ofthesilkonher skin!Then she put hershoes backon andput herold stockingsinto herbag.Next,she wenttotheshoedepartment,where shetried ona pairof newboots.Her footand anklelooked lovely.She couldnot believethattheywerea partof herself.注意.所续写短文的词数应为左右；

1150.至少使用个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；25,续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

3.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语4Paragraph1:After buyinga pairof newboots,shewalkedinto theclothing department.Paragraph2She wasabout toleave thestore whena kidrunning aroundreminded herof something.翻译小练习来到化妆镜前，上下打量着镜子里的自己，眼睛盯着鞋子，如果我的鞋子和我身上完美的衣服搭配，我看起

1.来会更漂亮吗？萨默斯太太心想，向部门的女售货员招手萨默斯太太问她今年的时装款式是什么，是否可以试穿一下

2.她的要求得到了批准，萨默斯太太继续尝试她认为在她身上最好的东西

3.身上穿着不同的衣服，她在镜子前转来转去，像时装秀上的超级模特一样欣赏自己

4.她一件接一件地试穿，深情地把它们放进购物车里

5.〃多可爱的女人！〃这是每个人看到我的反应〃萨默斯太太笑着说

6.〃哦，天哪！亲爰的我！我把我的孩子都忘了！萨默斯太太大声喊道，意识到自己做错了什么事，开始自

7.责〃对不起，女售货员，请您把我选的东西都放回去，因为我本来打算给我女儿珍妮买一双新鞋，买一件

8.新衣服，给孩子们买新衬衫和新袜子，好吗？我一定是昏了头！〃一种关心孩子的责任感驱使她思考钱该往哪里去的正确想法

9.参考答案来到化妆镜前，上下打量着镜子里的自己，眼睛盯着鞋子，如果我的鞋子和我身上完美的衣服搭配，我看

1.起来会更漂亮吗？萨默斯太太心想，向部门的女售货员招手Coming toa dressingmirror,looking atherselfinthe mirrorupanddownandfixinghereyesonhershoes,“Wont Ilookmore beautifulifmyshoesmatchaperfectdress onmy body”thought MissusSommers toherself,waving tothe salesgirlofthedepartment.萨默斯太太问她今年的时装款式是什么，是否可以试穿一下

2.MissusSommersasked herwhat thefashionabledressstylesofthisyearwereandwhethershecouldtrythemon.她的要求得到了批准，萨默斯太太继续尝试她认为在她身上最好的东西

3.Her requestsapproved,MissusSommerskepttryingonwhateversheconsideredwasthebestonher body.身上穿着不同的衣服，她在镜子前转来转去，像时装秀上的超级模特一样欣赏自己

4.With differentbeing changeddresses onherbody,she turnedaround andaroundinfront ofthemirror,admiring herselfasif shewereasupermodelatafashionshow.她一件接一件地试穿，深情地把它们放进购物车里

5.One dressafter anothertried on,sheputthem intoher shoppingcart fondly.”多可爱的女人！这是每个人看到我的反应萨默斯太太笑着说

6.What alovely woman!is theresponse foreveryonetoseeme.smiled MissusSommers.哦，天哪！亲爱的我！我把我的孩子都忘了！萨默斯太太大声喊道，意识到自己做错了什么事，开始

7.自责Oh,my!Dear me!I forgotallaboutmykids!”yelled MissusSommers,realizing thatshehaddone somethingwrong andstartingtoblameherself.对不起，女售货员，请您把我选的东西都放回去，因为我本来打算给我女儿珍妮买一双新鞋，买一件

8.新衣服，给孩子们买新衬衫和新袜子，好吗？“Excuse me,salesgirl,would yoube sokind asto letme putback allIhadchosen,for Ihad intendedto buymy daughterJaniea newpairofshoes,Mag anotherdress,boys newshirts andall ofthem newstockings我一定是昏了头！一种关心孩子的责任感驱使她思考钱该往哪里去的正确想法

9.Imusthavelostmyhead!”A senseofresponsibilityofcaringaboutherkidsdrovehertothinkoftherightideawherethemoney shouldgo4参考范文。