读后续写题目+拯救潜鸟 讲义 高三英语一轮复习写作专项

广东省六校（东莞中学、广州二中、惠州一中、深圳实验、珠海一中、中山纪念）高三上学期第二次联考英语读后续写题目阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文Police Outpost Lake isas farsouth asyou cango inCanada.In fact,next tothelake arethe protectedwetlands,where songbirds,ducks,and Canadageese glidedby（振翅）on thebreeze,touching downbriefly on the waters surfacebefore flappingtheirway backup into the sky.Standing atthe lakes edge,my cousin,Allan,and Icast ourfishing linesseparatelyonto thesmooth-as-glass water.Down the shoreline wasAllan sfather,myuncle Rick.He likedto fishalone,away fromdistractions,noise,and otherpeople.Allan shouted,“Dad,where shouldI stand”Uncle Rickpressed hisfinger tohis lips,pointed toa shadyspot bya largerockwhere hehad casthis line and shookhis headgently.“He wantsus to be quietor elsewe wont catchany fish・I whispered.“Why doI havetobeso quiet”asked Allan.All thosebirds aremaking morenoisethan Iever could!”I ignoredhim,pulling backon myrod gentlyand squintingintotheglare ofthe（潜sun.Out ofthe cornerof myeye,I caughta glimpseof afew greatnorthern loons鸟）gathering togethernot farfrom theshoreline.What werethey doingthere Loonsusuallytravel alone,but herewere fiveof themin acluster.Maybe itwas afamily Justthenone loon,making aloud painfulcry,swam awayfrom thegroup,toward me.“Allan!Come here.Now!”Allan laidhis fishingrod downon thedirty sand,darting toward me.“Come here.Take alook atthat loon.It sswimming towardus,not farawayfrom us.It strying toget ourattention.”The loonfinally stoppedin theshallow waternear shore,not tenfeet awayfromus.It wasso closethat wecould seeits roundred eyes.Strangely,the bird,s wingswereheld tightagainst itsbody.Wading intothe waterand gettingcloser tothe loon,we bothsaw afishing line鱼钩wrapped tightlyaround itsneck anda shinyred hookin itsbody.Left likethis,注意the looncouldn,t flyor fishor survive.It wasasking usto help!.续写词数应为词左右；

1150.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答2“Go fetchthe scissorsfrom thefishing box,“I urged Allan.As Iset downthe loonon thewater,it joyfully flapped its wings.试题分析本文是--篇记叙文，主题是人与自然文章描述了“我、和我的Allan叔叔在加拿大最南端的一个警哨湖边钓鱼，发现并拯救了一个被鱼线缠住的Rick潜鱼反映了“我”们是有爱心的人，热为友爱，热爱自然，这是值得广大青少年学习的榜样文章体现了人类关爱与保护动物的美德，适合高中生写作五要素分析When—one dayWhere—at PoliceOutpostLakein SouthCanada主要人物次要人物Who--I,Allan,the loon;Rick myunclewhat—Allan andI found a loonasking forhelpWhy—The loonwas wrapped by fishing lineandcouldnt fly.铺垫和伏笔.Just thenone loon,making aloud painfulcry,swam awayfrom thegroup,towardme为续写我们循着声音找到受伤的潜鸟埋下了伏笔文本we bothsaw afishing line为续写部分设计“我wrapped tightlyaround itsneck anda shinyred hookin itsbody“如何去解救这只可怜的潜鸟埋下了伏笔故事线Rick usasked tobe quietwhen fishing---foundaloon swimmingtowards us-found theloonwrappedbyfishinglineand rescuedit—情感线fond ofquietness andstaving alone---polite,curious andhonest---careful andfull ofhelpand love---分析续写段首，确定续写方向由第--段首句”去把剪万从钓鱼箱里拿来Go fetchthe scissorsfrom thefishing box我催促【艾伦）可设问如下urgedAllan,1How didAllan respondand what did hedo2What didus dowith the loon3How didthe loonfeel

4.Was the loon saved（这个问题结合第二段首句提问）5How did we felland whatdidwedo then由第二段首句（当我把As Iset downtheloonon thewater;joyfullyflapped itswings潜鸟放在水面上时，它高兴地拍打着翅膀）可设问如下

6.Did theloon flyaway andwhatdidit respond

7.How didI feel

8.What didAllan do

9.What didRick doand say（可结合主旨设问）运用和原

10.What isthe resultthe storyHow didI feelthen文相一致的语言风格组织续写情节创设续写两段故根据六要素和自己的想象，借助文本资源，事的情节，创设画面可以有动作、情绪、心理、语言等的描写［开端］“我催促去拿剪刀,取回剪刀〉我和一起Paragraph1:Allan AllanAllan剪断缠绕的线和身上的鱼钩“我”和感到欣慰Allan把潜鸟放在水面上时，它高兴地拍打着翅膀潜鸟不愿立即飞走-“我”Paragraph2:感到自豪则高兴地与潜鸟说起再见［结局］夸奖“我”们做了好事一Allan Rick潜鸟慢慢游走［感悟「我”感到欣慰，这次经历将永远留在“我”的记忆范文“Go fetchthe scissorsfrom thefishing box,“I urgedAllan.He immediatelytookaction,rushed totheshore,and returnedwith asmall pairof scissors.I tooka deepbreathand closedmy eyesfor amoment tostabilize myself.I carefullybent downtopick upthe diver.Surprisingly,the birdremained silent,as ifit completelybelieved wewerehere tosave it.Encouraged bymy courage,Allen walkedforward,cut thethreadaround theneck ofthe Qianlongwith scissors,and carefullyremoved thehook fromitsflesh.After thetask wascompleted,we breatheda sighof relief.As Iset downtheloonon thewater,it joyfullyflappeditswings.It staredat usand stoodup,flapping itswings vigorouslyagainst the lake surface.Itdoesnt wantto flyaway immediately,as ifexpressing gratitudeto us.Its displaydeeplymoved Alanand me.On theshore,Uncle Rick,who hadbeen observing,said,Children,I amimmensely proudof yourlove andconcern forbirds.Collaborating tohelpand maintainthe lifeof thisdiver isundoubtedly themost remarkablething wehaveever done.Bathed inthe goldensunshine,thelakeshimmered withenchantinglight,and birdsflew freelyonthewater-a scenethat willforever beengraved inourminds.点评续写部分按照时间顺序展开叙述，还有动作和心理描写结构层次清楚，上下文连贯句使用了副词开头，描写了急于救鸟的心情句使用了并列句构成动作1Allan2链，推动了故事情节发展句使用了计分词”的省略结构作状语表示明喻，3“as i丰富了句式句使用了介词短语有效地街接上下文句使用了的复合结构，46with描述了作者救鸟的场景句用分词短语作状语交待了我的动作感受和有效地与第6二段街接句用分词和形容词短语作状语描述了潜鸟的动作与心理和以简单789句，写出了我们的感受借用其他人物的对话揭示了作者与做了一件好事10Allan最后两句描述了作者的感受。