读后续写助人类--我自制取水装置帮助村民们 讲义 高考英语作文复习专项

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文Thirty yearsago,I wasa sixteen-year-old boy,tall andthin.It wasthe endofsummer andthe coolwinds offall werein theair.In frontof ahouse,there wasa truckloadof wood whichmy father,my brotherand I had unloadedthe daybefore.My fatherand my brother wereout todo farmwork,so Ineeded tomove thesepiecesofwoodaround thehouse againand againto wherewe werepiling thechoppedwood.And then[would coverit withoilcloth tokeep itfrom gettingwet.In thosedays,weused touse thesewood firesto cook.We triedour bestto collectfirewood becausewe stillneededsome to get throughthe wholewinter.I workedfast atfirst,but soonI realizedthat Ineeded togo slowerif Ididnt wanttomake myselftoo tired.Then Ispent muchtime pilingthe woodand tyingit togetherwith aropein caseof fallingdown.To startwith,I thoughtthe workwas boring.But thenitbecame agame forme.Seeing thatI couldpile the wood soneatly,I smiledduring thehardwork.After awhile,thewoodwas allpiled up,and myskinny armsfelt alittle sore,However Ididnt stopworking.I stillneeded tofetch somewater withcontainers from thespring nearour homeOur wellwater wasso fullof ironthat ittasted terrible,so allcookingand drinkingwater hadto comefromthespring.The five-gallon containersfelt liketheyweighed aton,but Ipicked oneat atime andcarried themall up the hill to my house.As Icarried thelast containerback home,I sawmy mothersmiling atme atthedoor witha glassof teain herhand,She saidto me,“Here youare baby.Just takea break.nWe satdown withour dogsat ourfeet,watching theleaves blowingin thewind Relaxinginthe momentof peaceand harmony,I figuredout a good wayto get water easier.注意1续写词数应为150左右2请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答I decidedto make a pipe to conveywater.My neighborscame to my house to getwater at dusk.原文大意本文讲述16岁时的我，把一车的木材一块一块整理堆放好之后，又去山泉那里打泉水回家，忙碌了一天之后，和母亲坐下来休息时，“我”决定建一个取水装置方便打水续写思路分析:我们来看看给出的首句第一段给出的首句“I decidedto makea pipeto conveywater.”接下来应该续写如何建水管，即材料和方法很多学生想不出用什么材料和方法，就避开来，而大篇幅去写如何号召邻居父母来帮忙建水管我认为续写第一段就是要你写建水管过程，因为从原文“我”的辛勤劳动描述中，可以看出“我”是吃苦耐劳、独立、爱思考的一个人所以后面要突出“我”怎样建水管，而不是怎样号召父母邻居来修建所以，有些不会表达的小细节你可以避开，但是续写重点没法避开那第一段怎么结尾呢？我们来看第二段的首句是My neighborscame to my house toget water at dusk.”于是倒推出第一段结尾处写:水管建成了，并邀请邻居来打水接下来第二段自然写邻居打到水之后，夸赞我的好办法，感谢我提供的便利所以，故事的主题就是用自己的办法，帮助家人和邻里的幸福感但是，光写这两个内容字数不够，得添加细节我根据原文最后一段“我”和母亲的对话，就在续写的第二段添加了如下细节You dida good job,my baby.My motherthunbed upmy invention.HYou makeall ofus ableto takea breakafter a-whole-day tiring labor.基于以上分析下水作文I decidedto.makea pipeto convey thewater.But whatcan Iuseto makea pipelong andglimpse of the piledstrong enoughCatchingagoodideawood abamboo,trees wereperfect!W ithcut struckme.The of my parents,!manageddown severalbamboo treesplants togetherto toand attachedthese hollowmakethe pipe.Then,an enginewas fittedto drawthespring waterup thehill tomy house.Finally,Itried theequipment andit didwork!I introducedit tomy neighbors.My neighborscame tomy housetogetwateratdusk.Just pressthe buttonof theengineand thewater couldbe transporteddirectly.With theirbuckets full,my neighborscheeredfor theconvenient wayand spokehighly ofmy intelligence.“You dida reallygoodjob,mybaby.My motherthumbed upmy intention.You makeall ofus ableto takea breakafter awholeday oftiringlabor.Seeing theirdelighted smiles,1felt proudand satisfiedto helpthemin myown way.参考范文I decidedto makea pipetoconveywater.I foundthe locationofthespring on the hillsidewashigher thanthat ofmy house,I choseto makeapipeout of bamboos becausetherewere thickbamboos everywhere,I putwooden supportsonthewater lines,and then1cut alotofbamboos.I connectedthe bamboopoles togetherand fixedthem tothe supports.ltworked!The clearspring flowedtomyhouse.It wasvery convenientfor myf ami Iy tousewater,And Ialso askedmy neighborsto cometomyhousetofetch drinkingwater.My neighborscame tom yhousetogetwateratdusk,My familywarmly welcomedthem.My parentsjust finishedcooking dumplingsThe foodcooked withwood fireswasreally delicious,When my neighbors fi11ed theircontainers withwater,mybrotherand Iinvitedthem totaste thedumplings.They allpraised us,“What politeboys!”I feltveryhappy andwanted todo morefor them,Then Ioffered tofix waterpipes forthem,too.They werevery supportiveofmyidea.Finally,with thehelp ofmyneighbors,Ihadmyneighbors*pipes installed,with whichthey didnthave toworry aboutwater supply.续写反思范文第一段写的是山泉水位置高，所以用竹子管道就可以而我看到原文倒数第二段最后一句upthehilltomyhouse”，就认为山泉水位置低于村庄位置，所以我不仅用到了竹子材料还使用了抽水泵很多学生想不到用竹子这种材料，我觉得用木头挖空或者用塑料管子做也可以，总比避开材料不写要好范文第二段添加的细节是一起吃饺子，结尾处是给每个邻居家里都安装了竹子管道，这种推广的方式很好，但是是以山泉水位置高为前提。