2023年全国英语高考1卷读后续写我的写作比赛讲评与示范讲义-2024届高三英语二轮复习

一.读后续写原题目When Iwas inmiddle school,my socialstudies teacherasked me to entera writingcontest,I saidno withoutthinking.I didnot lovewriting.My familycame fromBrazil,so Englishwasonly mysecondlanguage.［举彳列子］Writingwas sodifficult andpainful forme thatmy teacher hadallowed meto presentmy paperon thesinking ofthe Titanicby actingouta play,where Iplayed all the parts.No onelaughed harderthan hedid.So,why didhe suddenlyforce meto dosomething atwhich Iwas sureto failHis reply:Because Ilove yourstories.If yourewilling toapply yourself,I thinkyou havea goodshotat this.Encouraged byhis words,I agreedto giveit atry.【写作思路】I chosePaul Revere*s horseas mysubject.Paul Reverewas asilversmith（专艮匠）in Bostonwho rodea horseall nighton April18,1775to Lexingtonto warnpeoplethat Britishsoldiers werecoming.My storywould comestraight fromthe horse*mouth.Not abrilliant idea,but funnj,and unlikelyto beanyone else*s choice.【写作过程］What didthe horsethink,as hesped throughthe nightDid heget tiredHavedoubts Didhe wantto quitI sympathizedimmediately.I gottired.I haddoubts.I wantedtoquit.But,like Reveres horse,I keptgoing.I workedhard.I checkedmy spelling.I askedmyolder sisterto correctmy grammar.I checkedout ahalf-dozen bookson PaulReverefrom thelibrary.I evenread afew ofthem.When Ihanded inthe essayto myteacher,he readit,laughed outloud,and said,“Great.Now,write itagain.n Iwrote itagain,and again,and again.When Ifinally finishedit,thethought ofwinning hadgiven wayto theenjoyment ofwriting.If Ididnt win,I wouldn*tcare.当我在中学的时候，我的社会学老师让我参加一个写作比赛，我想都没想就拒绝了我不喜欢写作我的家庭来自巴西，所以英语只是我的第二语言写作对我来说是如此困难和痛苦，以至于我的老师允许我通过表演一个剧本来展示我关于泰坦尼克号沉没的论文，我在剧中扮演所有的角色没有人比他笑得更厉害了那么，为什么他突然强迫我做一件我肯定会失败的事情呢？他回答说.“因为我喜欢你的故事如果你愿意努力，我认为你很有可能获得这份工作”受到他的话的鼓舞，我同意试一试我选择保罗・里维尔的马作为我的主题保罗・里维尔是波士顿的一名银匠，1775年4月18日，他整夜骗马去列克星敦，警告人们英国士兵要来了我的故事将直接来自马的口述不是个好主意，但很有趣，不太可能是别人的选择马在黑夜中疾驰时在想什么呢？他累了吗？有疑问吗？他想辞职吗？我立刻表示同情我累了我有过怀疑我想辞职但是，就像里维尔的马一样，我继续前进我工作很努力我检查了我的拼写我请姐姐纠正我的语法我从图书馆借了六本关于保罗•里维尔的书我甚至读了一些当我把文章交给老师时，他读了后大笑起来，说“太好了现在，再写一遍”我写了一遍又一遍当我终于写完时，获胜的念头已经让位于写作的乐趣如果我没赢，我也不在乎注意

1.续写词数应为150个左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.ParaI:A fewweeks Iater,when Ialmost forgotthe contest,there camethe newsPara2:I wentto myteacher1office after the award presentation.

二、审题思考1第一段段首句的“news”是什么？根据第二段段首句the awardpresentat ion而且我要去参加颁奖仪式可以推断出消息是我的作品获奖了，2我为什么会拿到奖？我的作文很幽默，有意思让老师大笑，所以是funny自己的潜力直修改持不懈并且从中找到了乐趣3第一段的结尾和第二段开头如何衔接因为第二段段首句说“我要去老师办公室，所以我们应该想为什么我要去老师办公室也许是颁奖礼的时候看到了老师鼓堂的身影或者是我回想起了老师的鼓励4在老师办公室里我们会有怎样的对话？老师祝贺我，肯定我的天赋我感谢老师的鼓励，让我对写作有了态度上的转变，5如何回扣到“马”“But,I ike Revereshorse,I keptgoi ng.”

三、微情节设计Paral:A fewweeks Iater,when Ialmost forgotthe contest,there camethenews.1揭示news是什么2我的心情难以置信3参加颁奖典礼4观众反应5我想到/看到老师Para2I wentto myteacher1off iceafter the award presentation.1见面时的动作描写2老师祝贺我，肯定我的天赋3我感谢老师想到老师的督促，让自己对写作有了态度转变4我的感悟原创范文Paral:A fewweeks later,when/almost the contest,there cametheAfter fiercecompetition,my contributionstood outand won the firstplace.Never hadIanticipated thatmy writingcompetency couldreceive suchrecognition.At theawardceremony,hearing myname called,I strodeonto thepodium andtook thetrophy withexcitementand anunprecedented feelingof accomplishment.With thunderousapplauseechoing inthe auditorium,scarcely couldI waitto sharethe thehonor with myteacher,whocontributed alot tome discoveringmy potential and passions.Paya2:1to“w teacher飞office afttheawa/d DYesentation.As Ientered,he lookedupfrom hisdesk,a radiantsmile spreadingacross hisface,and said,Congratulations!Yourdiligence andperseverance paidoff.”But foryour inspiration,I couldnever wontheprize.I extendedmy cordialgratitude tohim foralltheguidance andaffirmation heofferedme.Recalling thehardships encounteredfor theduration ofwriting,I perceivedthatit wasthe self-assurance inmy ownpotentialandpersistence thatcounted themost.With it,I knewthat nochallenge wouldbe toodaunting.And Iwould keepgoing onmy path,likeRevered horse.下水文A fewweeks later,when Ialmost forgotthecontest,there camethenews.It wasme whowonthe firstprize!Overwhelmed bywild joy,I roseto myfeet andpunched myfist intheair,shouting outloudly Imade it!”Feeling onthe topof world,I couldinstantly picturemyfamily membershugging mewith pride.The followingday asI stoodonthestage oftheaward presentation,my tearsbrimmed overand rolleddown mycheeks unconsciously.Through mymind echoedmy teachersencouraging words.It wasthen thatI realizedthatwithout himI couldthave foundmyself insuch potential.94wordsI wentto myteachers officeaftertheawardpresentation.Extremely eagerand excited,Isteppde intohis room,expressing mysincere appreciationwithmyeyes glitteringwithcontentment.The momenta brightsmile workedits wayacross hisface,our glancesmetbriefly.I hopeyou caninsist onwriting Jsaid myteacher,holding outa handand strokingmyhead slightly.A strongemotion chokedmy words.It suddenlydawned onme thattoughas itwas,there wasnothing morevaluable thanthe senseof accomplishment.The goldensunlightslid inthe office,lighting myface aswell asthe futurepath formetofollow mywritingdream.102wrods。