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阅读下面短文,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文A Lessonfrom MySisterMy parentsworked veryhard atensuring thateverything seemedpleasant formeand Imostly ignoredthe factthat myelder sister was different.The childpsychologist hadtermedit asnAsperger Syndrome(阿斯伯格综合症,一种自闭障碍).This diagnosisturnedmy parentsworld upsidedown——but theynever letit affectme.我的父母非常努力地确保一切对我来说都是愉快的,而我大多忽略了姐姐与众不同的事实儿童心理学家称之为“阿斯伯格综合症”(阿斯伯格综合症,一种自闭障碍).这个诊断让我父母的世界天翻地覆一一但他们从未让它影响到我It wasonly at the ageof tenthat Istarted tonotice thedifferences,and becomeconsciousof mysocial lifeand self-image that I hadcarefully cultivated.My sisterwas(唠哝)socially awkward.She couldnot lookat peoplein theeye.She wouldmumble Rtoherself andrepeat thewords shehad justsaid underher breath.She,however,wasacademically capable,and hencewe attendedthe sameprimary school.Despite this,I never,ever acknowledgedin publicthat shewas my sister.There wasone incident,however,justtwo years ago,that remainsimprinted in my consciousness.It was the incident that changedhowI viewedmy sister.It was the incidentthat changedme.直到十岁时,我才开始注意到这些差异,并意识到我精心培养的社交生活和自我形象我姐姐在社交上很尴尬她不能直视别人的眼睛她会喃喃自语(嘟哝)然后低声重复她刚才说的话然而,她在学业上很有能力,因此我们上的是同一所小学尽管如此,我从未在公开场合承认她是我的姐姐然而,就在两年前,有一件事仍然留在我的意识中这件事改变了我对妹妹的看法这件事改变了我Being inprimary six,about tograduate,my sisterand herclassmates hadto putup a(融performance,whether ina group,or individually.Due toher inabilityto integrate入),my sisterwasthe only oneleft withouta group.The schoolhad madeit arule foreveryoneto putup anitem,so my sister hadto performindividually.nril sing,“my sistertoldmy parents,confidently.Hearing that,I wastaken abackand completelyshocked.Iknew shewould embarrassme,one wayor another.nNo!H Iprotested.My parentsshot mealook andthat waswhen Iknew my sisterwasgoing toperform,no matterwhat.Silently,I prayedthat somethingwould happenand Iwould nothave towatch my sister shameherself.在小学六年级即将毕业的时候,我姐姐和她的同学们不得不表演,无论是集体表演还是个人表演由于她无法融入(融入),我姐姐是唯一一个没有团队的人学校规定每个人都要挂一件物品,所以我姐姐必须单独表演“我会唱歌的,我姐姐自信地对父母说听到这些,我大吃一惊我知道她会以某种方式让我难堪“不!”我抗议道我父母看了我一眼,就在那时我知道我姐姐无论如何都要表演我默默地祈祷着会有什么事情发生,我不必看着我姐姐自惭形秽That daycame.I satin the hall,waiting forthe performancesto start.The lights(变昏暗)dimmed aminute ortwo laterand thecurtains partedto revealtheonlysolo一(眨眼)my sister.She blinkeda coupleof times,as ifthe lightsshining onher werehurtingher eyes.那一天来了我坐在大厅里,等着演出开始灯光变暗了(变昏暗)一两分钟后,窗帘拉开,露出唯一的独奏者一一我姐姐她眨眼(眨眼)有好几次,好像照在她身上的灯光在伤害她的眼睛注意续写词数应为词左右;
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2.(口吃,结巴地说)Paragraph1:It tookabout awhole minutefor herto stammerher nameand class.Paragraph2:How didI notknow thatmy sistercould singso sweetly
二、下水思路确定主题“我”一直以来在公开场合不承认有一个患自闭综合症的妹妹两年
1.前的一个小插曲改变了我对妹妹的看法,也改变了我自己原文第二段(There wasoneincident,however,just twoyearsago,that remainsimprinted inmy consciousness.It)wasthe incidentthat changed howI viewedmy sister.It wastheincidentthatchangedme.点明了整个故事的主题,所以续写部分将重心放我对妹妹的情感变化上anxiously—embarrassment--surprise—pride andregret—excited—proud时空变化黄色标出部分为原文关键信息续写两段时空变化不大,根据最后一
2.段第一句()可知,That daycame.I satin thehall,waiting forthe performancesto start.故事发生在校大厅,时间是妹妹独唱演出期间根据续写第二段段首提示语How did在时间上可以理解为演出期间或者是I notknow thatmy sistercould singso sweetly,演出以后的心理活动续写难点故事情节简单,须感同身受,注重细节描写与心理活动,否则很难写
3.出有画面感的细节内容因此,平时要多积累贴近学生生活,情景相类似的语料
三、下水续写1Paragraph1:It tookabout awhole minutefor herto stammerher nameand class.I watchedanxiouslyas shestood there,her voicequivering withnervousness.Her handstrembledslightly,and herface flushedred.Seeing this,I couldfeel mycheeks burningwithembarrassment,and foran instant,time seemedto standstill.How Iwished thegroundwould swallowme up!After whatseemed likeages,my sisterstarted tosing,and asuddensilence fell.To mygreat surprise,her voicefilled thehall witha sweetmelody,as ifit camefromthe singingof anangel.Tears burredmy eyesas Ilistened,overwhelmed bya mixofpride andregret.Paragraph2:How didI notknow thatmy sistercould singso sweetlyI justsat there inshock,not believingmy ears and eyes.Never inmy wildestdream couldI haveimaginedthat mysister had a talent for music.As agreat roarof applausebroke outattheend ofherperformance,everyone stoodup,clapping andcheering.It wasthe unexpectedapplauseand cheersthat wokeme upfrom mythoughts.The instantmysister left the stage,I ranupand threwmy armsaround her,too excitedto uttera word.It seemedthat alleyes wereonus inthehall.Incredibly,instead offeeling embarrassed,I wasmore thana littleproud tohave such a sister.下水续写1Paragraph1:It tookabout awhole minutefor herto stammerher nameandclass.I watchedanxiouslyas shestood there,her voicetrembling withnervousness.Her handstrembledslightly,and herface turnedred.Seeing this,I couldfeel mycheeks burningwithembarrassment,and foran instant,time seemedto beat astandstill.How Iwish thegroundcould swallowme up!It seemsthat aftera longtime,mysisterstarted singingand suddenlytherewas asilence.To mysurprise,her voicefilled thehall withsweet melodies,as iffromthe singingof angels.As Ilistened,tears welledup,filled withpride andregret.Paragraph2:How didI notknow thatmysistercould singso sweetlyI couldnthelp butsatthereinamazement,not believinginmyearsandeyes.Never inmy wildestdream hadIimagined thatmysisterhadatalentformusic.When herperformance endedwithenthusiastic applause,everyone stoodup,applauding andcheering.It wasthe unexpectedapplauseand cheersthat wokeme upfrom mythoughts.As soonas mysisterleftthestage,I ranup andhugged her,so excitedthat Icouldnt saya word.It seemsthat alleyes inthehall arefocused onus.Its incrediblethatIdidnt feelembarrassed,but rathervery proudtohavesuchasister.。