第01讲 读后续写之高效解读文本（讲通）

A第讲高效解读文本（讲义）01目录熟悉写作步骤目标1目标2审读文本信息，分析故事情节目标3高效构思故事情节目标优化语言结构4目标5避免易错点目标6高分原则目标7真题感悟、【写作步骤】二］【审读文本，分析情节】审读文本信息是为了更好的分析故事情节掌握六要素，可以对故事发生的时间、人物的身份、事件的过程和结果一目了然即who、when wherewhat whyhow根据六要素，抓住时间线，情节线，感情线，充分调动想o象创新思维，推测情节走势1高效构思故事情节】根据故事情节发展线和主人公的情感变化，确定故事主题是亲情、友情还是爱情，主题语境是人与自我、人与社会还是人与自然，把握故事主题，防止续写跑偏荒诞L分析段首句，根据其关键信息，提出问题，预设故事情节发展走向

2.注意段首句和续写部分的衔接，构思续写第一段和第二段的衔接，思考续写如何结尾，与前文做好首位呼应，体现故事的主题

3.情节和情感始终贯穿在故事的发展过程和主人公的细节刻画中，这些可以做到把故事续写的生动引人入胜

4.矛盾冲突可以强化人物性格、推动情节发展，在构思中应当将其贯穿始终具体表现为人与人之间的冲突、人与环境之间的冲突或人与自我的内心冲突等亡］【优化语言结构】续写情节应当具有正能量，情节连贯，符合逻辑体会原材料中的语言特点，从人物心理活动描写、外貌神态描写、肢体动作描写、场景描写等进行润色，提升语言表达质量，优化语言语言的优化不仅包括情节上，还体现在词汇和语法结构的灵活多样性上比如要点之间的衔接和过渡,上下文的呼应，高级句型的运用等本着语言形象生动的原则，把构思句子进行修改，使得行文流畅，逻辑合理，语法正确，避免句式单一，可以灵活使用如非谓语短语、独立主格结构、定语从句、复合结构、名词性从句、形式主语with it或形式宾语句型、强调句型、无灵主语、倒装句以及比喻、拟人等修辞手法在本作者随后专题中会有更多讲解亡］【避免易错点】

1.忽视文体的一致性如果文章是对话性较强的，我们在续写时要注意对话的使用，反之，如果文章以讲述为主,我们就要进行讲述,切忌前后文体不一

2.忽视每段首句的导向性有的文章是夹叙夹议类的，作者会在最后一段对事情进行评论如果第二段的首句是评论性语言，我们要顺着这个方向写下去

3.忽视与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接这是续写最常犯的错误我们有时只考虑故事情节的延续，忽视了与段落开头的衔接，这样很容易偏离主题

4.忽视第一段结尾部分与第二段开头的衔接第二段的开头起到承上启下的作用，因此第一段的结尾部分一定要与第二段的开头有所衔接

5.忽视应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性切忌时态、人称等的混乱使用，这将会影响得分，同时丰富的词汇以及词汇使用的准确性也能彰显我们的英语水平，给我们的续写添彩

6.忽视内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况将故事情节写得富有变化，同时不忘画线词语的覆盖率【高分原则】

1.内容丰富充实，与所给短文风格一致，体现正能量2•两段内容衔接自然，逻辑合理3,用细节刻画人物角色，体现细节

4.有效使用过渡连接词，结构紧凑

5.词汇丰富高级，语法句式丰富灵活6•词数充分150词左右，标点恰当，拼写准确

7.卷面整洁，书写优美【真题感悟】

1.（2023年新高考I卷真题）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文When I was inmiddle school,my socialstudies teacherasked me to entera writing contest.I saidno withoutthinking.I did not lovewriting.My familycame fromBrazil,so Englishwas onlymy secondlanguage.Writing wasso difficultandpainful for me thatmy teacherhad allowedmetopresent mypaper onthe sinkingof theTitanic byacting out a play,whereI playedall theparts.No onelaughed harderthan he did.So,why didhe suddenlyforce meto dosomething atwhich I was sureto failHis reply:Because Ilove yourstories.If yourewilling toapply yourself,I thinkyou havea goodshot atthis.Encouraged byhis words,I agreedto giveit atry.I chosePaul Reveredhorse asmy subject.Paul Reverewas asilversmith（专艮匠）in Bostonwho rodea horseatnight onApril18,1775to Lexingtonto warnpeople thatBritish soldierswere coming.My storywould comestraight fromthe horses mouth.Not abrilliant idea,but funny;and unlikelyto be anyone elseschoice.What didthehorsethink,as hesped throughthe nightDid heget tiredHave doubtsDid hewant to quit Isympathizedimmediately.1got tired.I haddoubts.I wantedtoquit.But,like Revereshorse,I keptgoing.I workedhard.I checkedmy spelling.I askedmy oldersister tocorrect mygrammar.I checkedoutahalf dozenbooks onPaul Reverefrom the library.I evenread afew of them.When Ihanded in the essayto myteacher,he readit,laughed outloud,and said,Great.Now,write it again.I wroteitagain,and again and again.When Ifinally finishedit,the thought of winninghad givenway to the enjoymentofwriting.If I didnt win,I wouldntcare.注意

1.续写词数应为150个左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答A fewweeks later,when Ialmost forgotthe contest,there camethe news.I wentto myteachers officeafter the award presentation.【答案】A fewweeks later,when Ialmost forgotthe contest,there camethe news.I wasinformed thatI wonthe firstprize inthe writingcontest and that there wouldbeanaward presentationin two days.I wasso happyto hearthe newsthat Iimmediatelyshared itwith myteacher.knew youdwin!I amproud ofyou.You madeit!”he saidexcitedly.Then camethebig day.When I was invited to thestage toreceive theaward,I expressedmy thanksto myteacher.I said,Its youwhomake mefall inlove withwriting,my socialstudies teacher.Without yourrecognition andguidance,I couldnthavewritten thisarticle.Again thankyou verymuch!”I wentto myteachers officeafter theaward presentation.My teacherwas waiting forme.Holding myhands,he saidCongratulations!You area goodwriter,so keepwriting/9You knowIdidntlike writingbefore,but nowI amcrazyabout it!I willtry mybest tocreate good works791said seriously.Since then,I havewritten manygoodworksand nowIam afamous writer.I owemy successto my social teacherwho isa beaconin mylife onthe roadto writing.【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者上中学的时候，社会学老师邀请作者参加一个写作比赛作者不喜欢写作，于是想都没想就拒绝了但是在老师的鼓励下，作者同意试一试作者在写作过程中虽然很累，但是没有放弃，坚持下来了在作者最终完成写作时，作者感到写作让他很快乐，他已经不在乎输赢了【写作步骤】.分析故事情节1

①由第一段首句内容“几个星期后，当我几乎忘记比赛的时候，传来了消息”和第二段首句“颁奖后我去了老师的办公室”可知，第一段可描写作者获得比赛一等奖，在颁奖典礼上作者表达了对社会老师的感激

②由第二段首句内容“颁奖后我去了老师的办公室”可知，第二段可描写老师鼓励作者继续写作，自此作者坚持写作取得了成功，作者将这一切归功于自己的老师.构思故事情节比赛消息传来——作者获奖——高兴——颁奖典礼感谢老师——颁奖后来到老师办公室——老师2告诉作者坚持写作——作者表达了对写作的喜爱——作者写作取得了成功——感激老师.语言优化3

①告知inform/tell

②成功做到make it/succeed

③表达express/convey情绪类

①高兴的happy/glad

②激动地excitedly/with excitement[高分句型1]I wasinformed thatI wonthe firstprize in thewritingcontestandthat therewould beanaward presentationintwodays.（运用了由连接词that引导的宾语从句）[高分句型2]Its youwhomake mefall inlove withwriting,mysocialstudies teacher.（运用了强调句）[高分句型3]I owemy successto mysocial teacherwho isa beaconin mylife nvthe roadtn writing.（运用了who引导的限制性定语从句）（年浙江卷月真题）

2.20231阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文I wasinvitedtoa cookouton anold friendsfarm inwestern Washington.I parkedmy caroutside thefarm andwalkedpast amilking housewhich hadapparently notbeen usedin manyyears.A noiseat awindow caught my attention,so Ienteredit.It wasa hummingbird（蜂鸟），desperately tryingto escape.She wascovered inspider-webs（4昧网）andwas barelyable to move herwings.She ceasedher strugglethe instantI pickedher up.With the bird inmy cuppedhand,I lookedaround to see howshe hadgotten in.The brokenwindow glasswas thelikelyanswer.I stuffeda pieceof clothinto thehole andtook heroutside,closing thedoor securelybehind me.When Iopened myhand,thebirddid notfly away;she satlooking at me withher brighteyes.I removedthe stickyspider-webs thatcovered herhead andwings.Still,she madeno attemptto fly.Perhaps shehad beenstruggling againstthewindow toolong andwas tootired Ortoo thirstyAs I earnedher upthe blackberry-lined pathtoward my car whereI kepta waterbottle,she begantomove.I stopped,and shesoon tookwing butdidnotimmediately flyaway.Hovering（悬停），she approachedwithin sixinches ofmy face.For avery longmoment,this tinycreature lookedinto my eyes,turning herhead fromside toside.Then sheflew quicklyout ofsight.During thecookout,I toldmy hostsabout the hummingbird incident.They promisedto fixthe window.AsI wasdeparting,my friendswalked metomycar.Iwasstanding bythe carwhen ahummingbird flewto thecenter ofour groupandbegan hovering.She turnedfrom personto personuntil shecame to me.She againlooked directlyinto myeyes,thenlet outa squeakingcall andwas gone.For amoment,all werespeechless.Then someonesaid,“She musthave cometo saygoodbye.”注意

1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答A fewweeks later,I wentto thefarm again.Iwas just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.【答案】A fewweeks later,I wentto thefarm again.As mycar nearedit my thoughts drifted back to the moment when Irescuedthe hummingbirdfromthespiders web.I rushedback to the desertedhouse.It wasa greatcomfort that the originalholein thewindow wasnowhere tobe found.Leaving thehouse,I couldnthelp wonderinghow itwas gettingon now.Hadit managedto findits wayback home,or wasit stillout theresomewhere strugglingto surviveIwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.A flashof movementcaughtmyattention.I turnedaroundtoseethe samehummingbird hoveringintheair.It seemedthat thebird waswaitingforme,its beadyeyes lockedonmine as if tryingto conveysome deep,unspoken gratitude.I felta surge of reliefand aweatthesight ofthis soundandgrateful creature,and I knew thatI wouldalways cherishthe memorieswe sharedas Iclimbed intomycarand droveaway.【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者被邀请去一个农场野餐，发现一个房子里有只蜂鸟被蜘蛛网困住了，作者把蜂鸟救了，把蜂鸟带出去的时候它迟迟不肯走，当作者走到一条布满黑莓的小路时，它开始动了，但是却不肯飞走，徘徊着，后来终于飞走了，当作者准备离开时，蜂鸟又飞到作者面前，好像是在和作者告别【写作步骤】.分析故事情节1

①由第一段首句内容“几个星期后，我又去了农场”可知，第一段可描写作者回到农场时所看到的和所想到的

②由第二段首句内容“我正要离开，这时蜂鸟出现了”可知，第二段可描写蜂鸟是如何对作者的以及作者的感想构思故事情节

2.想起救蜂鸟的时候——回到那个房子——想到那只蜂鸟——看见蜂鸟——蜂鸟的表现——作者的感想语言优化行为类

3.

①思绪回至I」thoughts driftback to/thoughts returnto

②匆匆回到rush backto/hurry backto

③盯着eyes lockedon/eyes staringat情绪类

①宽慰feel asurgeofrelief/feel relieved

②感激grateful/thankful[高分句型1]As mycar neareditmythoughtsdriftedbackto themomentwhenI rescuedthehummingbirdfrom thespidersweb.（由as引导的时间状语从句和when引导的限制性定语从句）[高分句型2]It wasa greatcomfort thattheoriginal holeinthewindow wasnowhere tobe found.（由that弓|导的主语从句）（年新高考卷真题）

3.2022I阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文It wasthe dayof thebig cross-country run.Students fromseven differentprimary schoolsinandaround thesmalltown werewarming upand walkingthe route（路线）through thickevergreen forest.I lookedaround andfinally spottedDavid,who wasstanding byhimself offtotheside bya fence.He wassmall fbrtenyears old.His usualbig toothysmile wasabsent today.I walkedover andasked himwhy he wasnt with the otherchildren.He hesitatedand thensaid hehad decidednot to run.What waswrong Hehad workedso hardfor this event!I quicklysearched thecrowd forthe schoolscoach andasked himwhat hadhappened.“Iwasafraid thatkids fromotherschools wouldlaugh athim,“he explaineduncomfortably.gave himthe choicetorunor not,and lethim decide.”I bitback myfrustration，慢/恼）,Iknewthe coachmeant well—he thoughthewasdoing theright thing.Aftermaking surethat Davidcould runif hewanted,I turnedto findhim comingtowards me,his smallbody rockingfrom sidetoside ashe swunghis feetforward.David hada braindisease whichprevented himfrom walkingor runninglike otherchildren,but atschool hisclassmatesthoughtofhim asa regularkid.He alwaysparticipated tothe bestof hisability inwhatever theywere doing.That waswhy noneofthechildren thoughtit unusualthat David had decidedto jointhe cross-country team.It justtookhim longer-thats all.Davidhadnot misseda singlepractice,and although he always finished hisrun longafter theotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.As aspecial educationteacher atthe school,Iwasfamiliar with the challengesDavid facedandwas proud of hisstrong determination.注意L续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.We satdown nextto eachother,but Davidwouldnt lookat me.I watchedas Davidmoved uptothestarting linewiththeother runners.【答案】We satdown nextto eachother,but Davidwouldnt lookatme.I saidgently andquietly,“No onecan changeyourmind,except yourself.If youdesire tochallenge yourself,there isnothing todo withothers thoughts.He satstill with adeep breath.“You havea fullpreparation beforethis event,which isthe mostimportant reasonwhy youshow uphere”,Iadded witha sinceretone.Hearing mywords,David turnedto metremblingly withtears spillingout of his eyes andexpressed hehad madea firm determination to finish the cross-country run.His coachheard whatDavid saidand gavemea look—the kindthat wasmore determinedthan anyoneelses.I watchedcs Davidmoved uptothestarting linewiththeother runners.The racestarted.It seemedthattherunwaywas extremelylong foryoung children,not tomention achild witha braindisease.David insisted on runningasifhe hadforgottenall hisweaknesses,thoughhewas trippedover withintheafew kilometers.It didnttake longbefore hepickedhimself upagain andcontinued hismission.Classmates allappeared onthe racingtrack,cheering forhim.Come on!Youcan makeit!We areproudofyou!”they shoutedenthusiastically.To everyonesjoy,he reachedthe finalline andrankedthe20th.It wasno moreimportant whetherhe wonthe firstplace ornot.It washis braveheart andstrong faiththat couldmake something unusual happen finally.【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者是一名特殊教育教师，在大型越野赛跑那天，发现患有大脑疾病的大卫独自站在一旁作者问其原因，他说准备放弃比赛从教练口中得知，因为担心同学们会嘲笑大卫，所以教练想让大卫自己去决定是否参加赛跑作者让大卫追寻自己的内心，不理会别人的看法,大卫最终参赛，尽管遇到困难，他战胜了自己，这已经无关名次，而是他的勇敢和坚定让这一切成为可能【写作步骤】.分析故事情节1

①由第一段首句内容“我们挨着坐着，但大卫不愿看我一眼“可知，第一段可描写作者鼓励大卫继续完成比赛，大卫经过强烈的心理斗争，最终决定参加比赛

②由第二段首句内容“我看着大卫和其他选手一起走到起跑线上”可知，第二段可描写大卫开始参赛，虽然中途遇到困难，仍然坚持到最后，完成比赛构思故事情节

2.鼓励大卫——心理变化——决定参赛——克服困难——加油助威——完成比赛——感悟

3.语言优化行动类

①深呼吸withadeep breath/breathe deeply

②坚持做insistedondoing/be stickto doing情绪类

①热情enthusiastically/with greatpassion

②骄傲be proudof/take pridein[高分句型1]You havea fullpreparation beforethisevent,which isthe mostimportant reasonwhy youshow uphere.（由which引导的非限制性定语从句和why引导的限制性定语从句）[高分句型2]Hearinemy words,David turnedtometremblingly withtears spillingoutofhiseyesandexpressed hehadmade afirmdeterminationtofinishthecross-country run.（现在分词作状语和省略that的宾语从句；介词with的复合结构）[高分句型3]It washis braveheart andstrong faiththat couldmakesomethingunusualhappenfinally,（il Itwas…th at结构引导的强调句型）。