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一、题目Mymothereyedmewithsuspicion.Idarednotlookather.KnowingthatIwaslatefromschoolfivedayscontinuouslyIcouldnotofferanacceptableexplanation.IknewshedidnotbelievethatIhadextraclasseseverydayandarrivedhomeafter5pm.Howeverrealizingshehadlittlechoicebuttobelieveinmeshetoldmethatdinnerwasintherefrigerator.Shehadtorushforhernightshiftatthelocalclinic.Eversincewelostourdadinanaccidentmymotherbecamethebreadwinner.Iwastheeldestamongthefoursiblingsanditfelluponmyshouldertoensurethattheycouldbecomeresponsibleadults.BesideshelpingmotherwiththehouseworkIregularlycoachedthemintheirstudies.ThankfullyneveroncehadIhadtoraisemyvoiceorforcethemtocompletetheirhomework.Butallofusmisseddadverymuch.Hewasamodelfatherandhusband.Lifewascruellytakenawayfromhimataveryyoungageof
42.Howevermymothermanagedtopullthroughandfoundajobattheclinic.Itwasverytoughonsomeonelikeherwhohadneverworkedbeforeinherlife.Butmoneywasscarceandtherewerefivemouthstofeed.Daddidnotleavemuchbehind.Heneversuspectedhewoulddiesoyoung.Westoppeddiningoutandhadourmealsmostlyathome.Webasicallylivedfromhandtomouth.ThatswhenitdawnedonmethatIhadtodomypartforthefamily.IknewmotherwouldnotagreebutIthrewcautionoutofthewindowandmanagedtogetapart-timejobatafast-foodrestaurant.IworkedthreehoursadayandmanagedtobringhomemoneysothatmysiblingsandIcouldgooutforoccasionalmoviesormeals.Iwassurethatmothersuspectedsomething.Butshecouldnotquitepointthefiguretothesourceofhersuspicion.Paragraph1:OnedaywhileIwasbusyservingthecustomersIwasshockedtoseemotherstandingoppositethecounter.Paragraph2:Mothermademesitdawn.Shewasalreadycryingsoweremysiblinqs.
二、审题思考L妈妈为什么会来到我工作的地方?是偶然吗.第二段段首句的地点是哪里?.我犯了什么错?.在店里我见到母亲后的反应是什么?.妈妈为什么哭?.我看到妈妈哭会怎样反应
三、教师下水文短语
四、连词成篇Paral:Version1Oneday^whileIwasbusyservingthecustomers^Iwasshockedtoseemotherstandingoppositethecounter.
①看到妈妈惊讶的表情的同时,我也看到她热泪盈眶【内容情绪+动作】【句theinstantseesbdoing】ItheastonishedlookofmymotherIcouldseehereyeswithtears.
②似乎她张嘴想说什么,但没有,只是转身离开,消失在人群中【内容动作】【句Itseemedthat;介词短语;onlytodo;非谓语】sheopenedhermouthsomethingbutshedidntturnaroundandedgeawayintothecrowd.
③随后,我搞砸了顾客的订单,焦虑地想着怎样给出一个合理的解释【内容动作+心理】【句with结构】Subsequently1screwedupcustomers9ordersanxietyabouthowtoofferaexplanation.
④最终,我决定说出真相【内容心理】UltimatelyItellthetruth.
⑤快餐店一到关门时间,我就快步走回家【内容动作】【句一……就……】thefast-foodrestaurant^closingtimecomeItrottedtowardshome.
⑥当我推开门,我看到妈妈和我的三个兄弟姐妹都在,坐在桌前【内容动作】【句时间状从,非谓语作状语】IpushedthedooropenIsawmymotherandmythreesiblingsallinbythetable.Paral:VersionOneday9whileIwasbusyservingthecustomersIwasshockedtoseemotherstandingoppositethecounter.
①我特别惊讶和尴尬以至于我不敢直视妈妈的眼睛【内容情绪一动作】【句so…that…倒装】Idarenotmymotherstraightintheeye.
②起初她似乎很吃惊,但后来她怀疑了很长时间的事情似乎得到了证实【内容情绪变化】【句并列句;Itseemedthat句式,主语从句】Sheatfirstbutthenitseemedthatforalongtimewas.
③我笨拙地请她点菜,然后看见她蹒跚地走向一张桌子,那张桌子已经被我兄弟姐妹占领了【内容动作描写】【句并列句;非谓语作定语】Itookherordersandsawhertoatablebymysiblings.
④注意到我的愁容,而且是知道我家庭情况的我同事立即主动接替我的工作【内容动作描写】【句定语从句】Mycolleaguewhomyworriedexpressionandknewaboutmyfamilysituationinstantlytotakeovermyduties.
⑤我缓慢解开围裙,加入了家人中间【内容动作】Imyapronslowlyandjoinedmyfamily.Para2:Mothermademesitdown.Shewasalreadycryingsoweremysiblings.
①我再也控制不住感情,泪水夺眶而出,夹杂着羞愧和悔恨【内容情绪一动作】【句并列句,cant…anymorewith结构】myemotionsanymoreandmytears
②“请原谅我隐瞒兼职工作的事情我只是想要为家庭尽一份力”我啜泣道【内容语言描写】“Pleaseforgivemehidingthetruthaboutmypart-timejob.Ijustwanttodomypartforourfamily.1
③然而,妈妈的回应震惊了我【内容情绪】【句无灵主语】mother9sme.
④用她的话来说,她感激我的付出,希望我可以平衡好工作和生活【内容间接语言描写】【句介词短语】Inherwordsshemyworkandstudy.
⑤我的兄弟姐妹承诺会好好学习和做家务【内容间接语言描写】Andmysiblingspromisedtostudyandhousework.
⑥我们的手被妈妈紧紧握住,眼泪变成了笑容【内容动作定格】【句with复合结构,无灵主语】tearsgrins.
五、最终自测Paral:Version1OnedaywhileIwasbusyservingthecustomersIwasshockedtoseemotherstandingoppositethecounter.
①看到妈妈惊讶的表情的同时,我也看到她热泪盈眶
②似乎她张嘴想说什么,但没有,只是转身离开,消失在人群中
③随后,我搞砸了顾客的订单,焦虑地想着怎样给出一个合理的解释
④最终,我决定说出真相
⑤快餐店一到关门时间,我就快步走回家
⑥当我推开门,我看到妈妈和我的三个兄弟姐妹都在,坐在桌前Paral:Version1OnedaywhileIwasbusyservingthecustomersIwasshockedtoseemotherstandingoppositethecounter.
①我特别惊讶和尴尬以至于我不敢直视妈妈的眼睛
②起初她似乎很吃惊,但后来她怀疑了很长时间的事情似乎得到了证实
③我笨拙地请她点菜,然后看见她蹒跚地走向一张桌子,那张桌子已经被我兄弟姐妹占领了
④注意到我的愁容,而且是知道我家庭情况的我同事立即主动接替我的工作
⑤我缓慢解开围裙,加入了家人中间Para2:Mothermademesitdown.Shewasalreadycryingsoweremysiblings.
①我再也控制不住感情,泪水夺眶而出,夹杂着羞愧和悔恨
②“请原谅我隐瞒兼职工作的事情我只是想要为家庭尽一份力”我啜泣道
③然而,妈妈的回应震惊了我
④用她的话来说,她感激我的付出,希望我可以平衡好工作和生活
⑤我的兄弟姐妹承诺会好好学习和做家务
⑥我们的手被妈妈紧紧握住,眼泪变成了笑容
六、优秀作文赏析
(一)AnxiousanduneasyIendeavoredtoignoremymothersexistenceandcontinuedtoservemypreciouscustomers.Motherseemedtohavecapturedmyembarrassmentthustrottingtowardsthedoorandwaitedmeoutside.ItwasnotlongbeforeIfinishedmyworkandexhaustedlypullthedoor.Undoubtedlymyconcernedmotherwasstilltherewhoseeyestwinkledwithtears.Onthewayhometherewasnothingbutterriblesilence.Eventuallywereachedhome.WithamixtureofremorseandshameIdroppedmyheadinordertoavoidseeingtheheartbrokenfigure.SorrowchokedmeandImurmuredWhatIhavedonewasinthehopeofbringinghomemoney.^^Mothersobbedstrokedherfingersthroughmyhairandsaidinatendervoice“Thankyoudear.Improudofyou.^^Weembracedeachothertightly.
(二)ForawhileIwasatalosswhattodonext.UrgedbymybossIcontinuedtoservethecustomers.AftercompletingthejobIdashedtowardsmymumasfastasmylegscouldcarrymewithamixtureofembarrassmentandshameoverwhelmingme.StandinginfrontofmymumIcouldntlookherstraightintheeyebutsaidnIamsorrythatIcheatyoumom.Amazingenoughmotherdidntcriticizeme.MotherapologizedtomeIamafraidthatIhavenocapabilitytoofferyouaaffluentlife*withtearsbrimmingover.Hearingthis1strokedmyfingersthroughherhairandsaidMumyouhavegonegreatlengthstodoeverythingyoucan.IamtheeldestsoIshouldbearmyresponsibilitytobringhomemoney.RaisinghereyebrowsinastonishmentandmeetingmygazeMumsmiledHThankyouyouhavegrownup.Insteadofcryingweembracedeachotherwithbiggrinsonourcheeks.
(三)Withherlipstremblingshestartedatmeandcouldn*tutteraword.Whatastonishedmewasthatallmysiblingscamealongwithher.AllofasuddenIrealizedthattheyhadknownitbefore.StandingsilentlyonthepreviousspotIendeavoredtospeaktothemMumJIsaidultimatelyHIworkheretomakesomepocketmoneyforus.Somovedwasmotherthatsheheldmetightlystokingmyshorthairgently.nLetustalk.*1Motherpulledachair.Tearsrollingdownhercheeksmotherpraisedmeformyselflessdedicationtosupportourfamily.nYouhavegrownuphoney.Itismygoodfortunetohavesuchagoodkidasyou.HearingmotherswordssiblingsputmythumbsupandIcouldseetheirsparklingeyes.AfterthatbathedinthewarmthoffamilyIwentonworkingandsetadiligentrolemodelformysiblings.
1.eyemewithsuspicion怀疑地看着我
9.coachsbin...辅导某人…
2.anacceptableexplanation一个可以接受的解释
10.Neveroncehadsbdonesth.某人从未做过某事
3.havelittlechoicebuttodo除了做某事外别无选择
11.pullthrough渡过难关
4.nightshift夜班
12.scarce
5.clinic诊所
13.fromhandtomouth
6.breadwinner养家糊口的人
14.Itdawnedonmethat+句子某人突然明白……
7.sibling
15.throwcautionoutofthewindow把谨慎抛到窗外
8.XXfalluponmyshoulder.XX落在我的肩上
16.occasional
1.theinstant+从句,主句一就
2.capturetheastonishedlookofmymother看(捕捉)到妈妈惊讶的表情
3.eyesmoisturizewithtears热泪盈眶
4.turnaround转身
5.Itseemedthat+句子似乎
6.inthehopeof...想(做某事)
7.edgeaway离开
8.disappearinthecrowd消失在人群中
9.subsequently随后
10.screwupsth弄砸某事
11.anxietyaboutsth对于某事的焦虑
12.areasonableexplanation一个合理的解释
13.beresolvedtodo=resolvetodo决心做某事=bedeterminedtodo=determinetodo
14.Scarcelyhadsbdonewhensbdid一就=Hardly...when...=Nosooner...than...
15.trottowards快步走向
16.beseatedbythetable坐在桌旁
17.darenotdosth(不)敢做某事
18.looksbstraightintheeye直视某人眼睛
19.surprise=astonish=astound=startle使某人惊讶V.
20.surprised=astonished=astounded=startled感到惊讶的
21.surprising=astonishing=astounding=startling令人惊讶的
22.suspect
23.confirmV.确认,证实
24.clumsily笨拙地
25.takeonesorders请某人点菜
26.aworriedexpression愁容
27.myfamilysituation我的家庭情况
28.takeovermyduties接替我的工作
29.removemyapron解开我的围裙
30.staggerto...蹒跚走向…
31.beoccupiedby...被…占据
32.containmyemotions抑制感情
33.tearsbrimmedover热泪盈眶
34.withamixtureofshameandremorseoverwhelmingme羞愧又悔恨(地)
35.forgivesbforsth原谅某人某事
36.nevertheless然而
37.inoneswords用某人的话来说
38.beappreciativeof感激
39.withtheexpectationthat希望…•一
40.promisetodo承诺做某事
41.becommittedto致力于做某事
42.clutchsbshands抓紧某人手
43.sbshandsareclutchedinsbs手被抓紧
44.grin笑容
1.anxiousanduneasy紧张不安的
2.endeavortodo努力做某事
3.ignoreonesexistence忽视某人存在
4.captureonesembarrassment捕捉到某人的尴尬
5.trottowards快步走向
6.Itwasnotlongbefore...不久之后,……
7.exhaustedly疲惫地
8.undoubtedly毫无疑问
9.eyestwinkleswithtears热泪盈眶
10.withamixtureofremorseandshame悔恨又羞愧(地)
11.dropone*shead低头
12.heartbroken心碎的
13.sorrowchokeme我很难过
14.strokeherfingersthroughmyhair手指抚摸头发
15.inatendervoice温柔地说
16.embraceeachother拥抱彼此
1.atalosswhattodo茫然无措
2.dashtowards冲向
3.asfastasoneslegscouldcarrysb飞快的
4.withamixtureofembarrassmentandshameoverwhelmingme尴尬又羞愧地
5.looksbstraightintheeye直视某人
6.apologizetosbforsth因某事向某人道歉
7.withtearsbrimmingover泪眼朦胧地,
8.strokeonesfingersthroughsbshair手指抚摸某人头发
9.gotogreatlengthstodosth竭尽全力做某事
10.bearresponsibilitytodo承担做某事的责任
11.raiseoneseyebrowsinastonishment惊讶扬眉
12.meetone*sgaze与某人对视
13.withbiggrinsononescheeks某人笑着,……
1.withone*slipstrembling嘴唇颤抖
2.can*tutteraword说不出一句话
3.whatastonishedmewasthat令我惊讶的是……
4.comealongwith和某人一起
5.endeavortodo努力做某事
6.pocketmoney零花钱
7.Tearsrollingdownonescheeks...眼泪流下来,……
8.praisesbforsth称赞某人某事
9.selflessdedication无私奉献
10.putonesthumbsup点赞
11.bebathedinthewarmthoffamily沐浴在家庭的温暖下
12.adiligentrolemodel一个勤奋的榜样。