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Unit10ConclusionPurposeofaconclusionSeethewritingtips.ContentofaconclusionTheauthordeducesthatChinesemainlanduniversitystudentsexpectationsbutnotexperiencesofformativeassessmentcorrespondtothoseofstudentsintheWest.Theauthorhighlightsthreekeyfindings:firstformativeassessmentseemstopositivelyinfluencelearningindifferenteducationalcontexts;seconditbenefitsstudentspsychologically;andthirditimprovescommunicationbetweenstudentsandtheirteachersaswellasthesocialenvironmentintheclassroom.Theauhtoracknowledgestwolimitations:firstmoreundergraduatethanpostgraduatestudentsandmorefemalesthanmalesparticipated;secondarelativelysmallproportionoftheparticipantswereinterviewed.Theauthorprovidespossibleexplanationsforthefirstlimitationandexpressesregretaboutthesecondlimitation.Healsoemphasizesthatthestudyisvaluabledespitetheselimitations.TheauthorendstheConclusionwiththeobservationsthatChinaisbecomingmoreinfluentialintheworldandthatanincreasingnumberofChinesestudentsisenrollinginuniversitiesintheWest.Hispurposeistopredictorunderscorethepotentialfuturebenefitofconductingmoreresearchineducationandintoformativeassessmentinthispartoftheworld.StructureofaconclusionTheauthortransitionstotheConclusionwith“ThedataproducedthroughthisstudyatthebeginningofSentence
1.Theauthortransitionstothelimitationswith“Oneweaknessofthepresentstudy”inSentence5andtoageneralresponsetothesewithDespitetheselimitations”inSentence
13.InSentence14theauthorsignalshispredictionwith〃itislikely.”Whileitwouldbeacceptablenottodividetheparagraphintoshorterparagraphsdoingsomayaidcohesionandimprovereadability.PossibleplaceswherethiscouldbedonearewheretheauthorbeginsdiscussingthelimitationsofthestudyinSentence5andwherehemovesawayfromthissubjectinSentence
13.TransitioningtotheconclusionApproach1:1A2B3BApproach2:IB2A3AWhilethesentencesthatusethefirstapproachbeginwithastandardlinkingphrase:zzlnconclusion7in1A;“Tosumupin2B;andAllinall”in3B.Thosethatusethesecondapproachdonot.Thesetransitionmoresubtlybyusinglanguagethatsignalsthatthepaperiscomingtoaconclusion:zzltcanbesurmisedfromthefindingspresentedanddiscussedaboveinIB;Thestudysresultsin2A;andAnalysisofthedatafromtheWorldBankundertakenhere”in3A.AcknowledginglimitationsAppropriate:lz24Inappropriate:356Sentence3isinappropriatebecausethewriterisbeingtoodefeatistbylabelingtheresearchasinadequateandadvisingreaderstoregardtheresultswith“skepticism.”Sentence5isinappropriateasthewriterisbeinginsincerebydeflectinginthesecondpartofthesentencefromthelimitationbycomparinganotheraspectofthestudytoothers.Sentence6isinappropriatesincethewriterisbeingarrogantbyclaimingthathisresearchmethodologyissuperior.Part31Evaluatingaconclusion2SamplerevisionTosumupithasbeendemonstratedhowviolenceincomputergamesaffectschildrendifferentlytothatontelevision.Oneofthekeyfindingspointstoaninversecorrelationbetweenageandtheeffectsofplayingcomputergameswithviolentcontent.Thedataontheeffectsofwatchingviolentcontentontelevisionwerequiteunexpected.Amajortakeawayisthatfurtherresearchontherelationshipbetweenviolentcontentandbehavioralissuesinchildrenisurgentlyneededconsideringthatthisstudysresultscontradictthoseofmanyotherstudies.Thestudysufferedanumberofsetbackssuchasfailingtomeetwithallparentswhovolunteeredtobeinterviewedandleavingsomeofthedataunanalyzed.Thiswasdueprimarilytoinsufficienttimeresources.Theseparentsmaybeinterviewedandtheremainingdataexaminedforafollow-upstudy.Anotherareaworthwhileexploringishowmediacorporationsprofitfrombroadcastingadvertisementsthatcontainmildviolence.RestatementofthethesisorpurposeofthepaperThepurposeisclearlyrestatedinSentence
1.SummaryofthemainfindingsThemainfindingsaresummarizedinSentences2-3althoughthedescriptioninSentence3veryinterestingisveryvague.ThestatementmadeinSentence4canalsobeconsideredasakeyfinding.LimitationsWhilethestudyslimitationsareacknowledgedinSentence6andwhilethereasonscanbededucedfromSentence7“ifthereisenoughtimetheyarenotclearlyexplainedorjustified.ClosingstatementAsuggestionforfutureresearchismadeinSentence
8.ContentWhilethedifferentelementsofaConclusionareeasilyrecognizablewell-connectedandsoundlyorganizedtheinformationinSentence5isirrelevant.ItisalsounnecessaryandinappropriatetousethewordUnfortunately”inSentence
6.Furtherimprovements:Summarizethefindingsaccurately.Clearlyexplainandjustifythelimitationsoftheresearch.Deletealltheirrelevantinformation.。
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