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Unit9FindingsanddiscussionPart1PurposeofafindingsanddiscussionsectionSeethewritingtips.ContentofafindingsanddiscussionsectionThereisachartandanumberofstatisticsthroughout.Therearealsocodese.g.”IU152”inParagraph6usedtoidentifyresearchparticipantswhohavebeenanonymized.Theauthorfirstpresentsandanalyzesdatagatheredthroughthequestionnairebeforemovingontothedatacollectedthroughinterviews.Healternatesgenerallybetweenpresentingandanalyzingdatasometimessynthesizingboth.Thechartcontainscategoricalormorespecificallynominaldatae.g.marksorgradesand“notatalleffectivewhicharealsodiscretesincetheycanbecountedbutnotmeasured.Thecharttypeisabargraphormorepreciselyaclusteredcolumnchart.Thereisalsoatableunderneaththatshowsspecificvaluesforeachcategoryandlabel.Theauthorusescautiouslanguageorhedgese.g.z/most...althoughatalowerrate”inSentence4andasmallerbutstillnotableproportioninSentence
11.3StructureofafindingsanddiscussionsectionTheauthorisfollowingtheorderinwhichheusedhisresearchmethodstocollectdata:firstthequestionnaireandthentheinterview.Theinterviewalsoservedtoexplorestudents/questionnaireresponsesmoredeeplymakingitlogicalthatthelatterdataarepresentedandanalyzedlast.Researchersalsocommonlypresentquantitativedatasuchasfrequenciesandpercentagesfirstbeforequotingresponsesfromparticipantssincetheformeraremoreeasilycomprehensibleandfunctionasalead-intomorecomplexdata.Theauthorusuallypresentsdatafirstbeforeanalyzingthem-sometimesbetweenandsometimeswithinparagraphs.ThisisthecasewithadeductiveapproachwhichscholarlyworkwritteninEnglishtypicallyemploys.Part2DescribingstatisticalfindingsSentence2:overwhelmingmajority;78%;87%;91%;91%;81%;most;atalowerrate;62%Sentence3:veryfewSentence4:Averylargeproportion;83%Sentence5:mostfrequentlySentence6:highestnumberofSentence7:TwoSentence8:nearlyafifth;overaquarterSentence9:almostonethird;asmallerbutstillnotableproportionSentence10:statisticaldifference;veryminimalBeingsuitablycautiousSentence1:indicateSentence2:signify;likelySentence3:suggest;might;insomecasesSentence4:overarching;can;appearsSentence5:mayPart31Evaluatingafindingsanddiscussionsectiontoincludeallthemostnotablesimilaritiesanddifferencesbetweenthemaleandfemalevegetarianparticipantsandthosebetweenthemaleandfemalevegetarianmeat-eatingparticipants.Onefurtherfindingthatcouldbeincludedorcomparisonthatcouldbemadeisthatincontrasttothetwovegetarianparticipantsneitherofthemeat-eatingparticipantsexperiencedaperiodofnoprogression.ToneThekeyconclusionthewritermakesinSentence9generalizestoallvegetariansandmeat-eaterswhichisnotsupportedbythedatathatincludesonlyfourparticipants.HealsomakesassumptionsinSentences10-14thatgobeyondthescopeoftheexperiment.HistoneinSentence14issnappishevenarrogant.Moreoveritappearshemaybebiasedashedescribesthemalemeat-eatingparticipantsprogressionas“amazinginSentence
9.Furtherimprovements:Comparethedifferencebetweenthetwogroupsregardingthedegreesofprogression.Makegeneralizationbasedondataandevidence.Usemorecautiouslanguageinmakinggeneralization.2SamplerevisionThelinechartbelowillustratestheprogressioninthenumberofpush-upsabletobeperformedbyfourparticipantsovera4-weekperiod.ThegroupincludedonemaleandonefemalevegetarianMVandFVrespectivelyandonemaleandfemalemeat-eaterMMandFMrespectively.Thefigurerevealsthatallfourparticipantsachievedanotableincreaseinthenumberofpush-upstheywereabletodobytheendofthemeasuringperiod.Howeverthereweresubstantialdifferencesintheoverallprogressionbetweentheparticipants.Whiletheoverallprogressionforthemaleandfemalevegetarianparticipantswasonlyfiftyandsixtypercentrespectivelythatforthemaleandfemalemeat-eatingparticipantswasonehundredsixtyandonehundredtenpercentrespectively.Whatismoretherateofprogressionforthemaleandfemalevegetarianparticipantswaspracticallythesame.Bothoftheseparticipantsalsosharedone1-weekperiodwheretheydidnotprogressatallalthoughatdifferentendsofthemeasuringperiod.Incontrastthemaleandfemalemeat-eatingparticipantsprogressedatsomewhatdifferentratesespeciallybetweenWeeks3and4duringwhichthefemaleparticipantimprovedbythreepush-upsandthemaleparticipantbyanamazingsixpush-ups.Anotherobservationisthatincontrasttothetwovegetarianparticipantsneitherofthemeat-eatingparticipantsexperiencedaperiodofnoprogression.Thesedataindicatethatmeat-eatersmaybemorecapableofbuildingphysicalstrengththanvegetariansregardlessofwhethertheyaremaleorfemale.Onepossibleexplanationisthatadietthatincludesmeatprovidesthenecessaryproteinformusclegrowththataplant-baseddietislessabletoprovide.Thedataalsosupporttheconclusionthatmalemeat-eatersareabletobuildphysicalstrengthmorequicklythanfemalemeat-eatersalthoughitisuncertainwhethertheratewouldbesustainedindefinitely.Incontrastmaleandfemalevegetariansappeartobuildmusclestrengthatapproximatelythesamerateandfemalesappeartodosotoanevenslightlyhigherdegreethantheirmalecounterpart.OrganizationTheorganizationalapproachtopresentingandanalyzingthedataislogical.InSentences1-2thewriterintroducesthefigurethatsummarizesthedatabeforemakinganoverarchingobservationinSentence
3.InSentences4-8hecomparesmaleandfemaleparticipants:malewithfemalevegetarianparticipantsmalewithfemalemeat-eatingparticipantsandvegetarianparticipantswithmeat-eatingparticipantsgenerally.InSentences7-8hereferstospecifictimeperiods.Thewriterthereforemovesfromgeneraltomorespecificwhenpresentinghisdata.InSentences9-14heanalyzesanddrawsconclusionsbasedonthefindingspresentedearlier.VisualizationThedataareadequatelycorrectlyandsuitablyrepresented.Thefigureisclearcorrectlylabeledandappropriateforthetypeofdatacollected.Iteasilyallowsreaderstounderstandandcomparethedataforthemselves.TheexplanationgiveninSentences1-2helpsclarifythemeaningofthefouracronymsMVMMFVFMusedforthefourtypesofparticipants.CompletenessWhilethemeaningofakeyfindingissubjectivethewriterappears。
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